Tuesday, July 13, 2010

Teaser Tuesday

Just posting my first teaser for Teaser Tuesday!

This is a scene from "Catching Up to You" (synopsis in the left sidebar). Here's a quick overview of what happened right before for context: This is a flashback in which Kendall is five and Colt is nine. Colt is convinced you can only prove you're best friends with somebody if you throw one shoe each tied together over  a phone line. He makes Kendall sacrifice a shoe and the following ensues:

     I watched as he made his way up the tree again. He seemed super human, climbing swiftly, barely making a sound. I was less graceful, taking an alternate route, scared that if I touched the same branches as him they’d fall from the weight. I felt a rush run through me as a gush of wind sent the leaves around us flying into the air and fluttering to the ground. Colt was right, the wind was stronger up here. My hair whipped around my face with the breeze.
     “Here’s good,” Colt finally said. He patted the branch he was sitting on, signaling me to come and join him.
     I carefully moved over and straddled the branch. When I was safely perched, I exhaled, not having realized I’d been holding my breath.
     “You’re fine,” he said.
     “I know.” I looked around. It was cool up here. I could see our houses. They looked even closer together from here than they did from up close. I could see beyond our houses too, into the street. Cars zoomed by, unaware of the two kids in the tree.
     I looked over at Colt. Behind his head, our shoes swayed on the phone line slowly.
     “So now we’re really best friends,” Colt said, turning his head to look at the shoes.
     “We weren’t before?” I asked.
     “Well, yeah. But now everyone knows.”
     “No one but us goes in these woods.”
     He shrugged. “Well, now we won’t forget.”
     I wish I could say this was the moment I fell in love with Colt because those words, now that I look back on them, were true to this day. But honestly, I was five, and the weight of those words didn’t really hit me until years later when we’d visit our spot again and again.
Let me know what you think! Any suggestions?

14 comments:

Caitlin said...

Ooh I love this!! Colt is such an awesome name, too. That last paragraph had me going "Awwww!" and my dad's now looking at me like, "Ok crazy...".

Congrats on the first Teaser Tuesday! :D I'm glad neither of us know what we're majoring in yet ;)

Lala said...

Hey, I totally remember reading this on inkpop, and thanks for following me!

Noelle said...

@Caitlin - My parents laugh at me when I start oohing and aahing out loud. lol. It's unavoidable. But thank you! I'm glad you liked it!

@Lala - No problem! You're blog's great!

Lia Victoria said...

That is completely adorable. I love little kid friendships :D

juli said...

This is so sweet. I'm a sucker for couples who were best friends as little kids and then end up falling for each other. The last paragraph was absolutely adorable. :)

Karla Nellenbach said...

Welcome to the Teaser Tuesday Club! This was so sweet. I just loved it and am wondering how their love story unfolds :)

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Glen Akin said...

I've had this open on my browser for ages, and I just read it now. How stupid of me! This is really good, and very cute. I never could climb trees when I was little though

Noelle said...

@Glen Akin - I do that all the time! lol. But thank you! I've never been able to either... obviously I'm living vicariously through Kendall.

Angela A said...

Hi there! I just found your blog and I heart heart heart it. I LOVE finding other teenagers who write YA and blog. :)

Ellen Faith said...

Wow. That is gorgeous and totally sweet. As many people have said: I love that last paragraph.

Juliette Rose said...

You are an amazing writer.!! I heart this blog, and your stories. I know that one day you'll most definitely have your books in stores with thousands of people buying them. Keep up the ah-mazing work.!!(: ♥

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Shayda Bakhshi said...

Hello, ADORABLE--I love the whole best-friends-to-couple setup. :)

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